Looks good.
One suggestion though. While I know that you are delivering this to college students (I hope my Aussie/US translation of college is correct, that’s like 18+ isn’t it?) I have had quite a few difficulties communicating detailed systems to 12-16 year olds.
I would suggest that you not go through and have them work too much on too many systems. You do’t want to overwhelm them and have them confuse systems together, or have them think that it seems like all too much. Many people new to memory techniques often misunderstand that associations and loci are all things they already know.
I have taught Loci for over a decade and EVERY session (17/18 year olds and 15 year olds) someone complains that now they have to remember MORE things, like the rooms i their house. They fail to see the connection straight away.
I’d show and explain a more general concept, using one major example for them to ‘be the wizard’ as you said, and then perhaps very small examples to show the others. You want them to see that it is not that hard, and that the payoff is worth the little bit of a mental effort at the start.
If you have them understand the PAO and Loci systems (which are different enough and can be used across things like cards, numbers and dates…etc…) the you can use it over and over to show small demonstrations. EG, 3-6 cards, 6-10 numbers etc…if you explain the theory well enough, people will get the point without getting overwhelmed. It is irrelevant what the 2 of clubs, 7 of hearts and Ace of spades is to them as they will need a lot of time to develop that system. But if you can show what your examples are (no real need to explain HOW you got there yet) and how different combinations of these cards produce fantastically vivid and unusual images, then you will get laughs and it will make sense.
I found that my card system has multiple systems (EG all 7’s are cricket players…why? I’m not sure, they just are and it worked so I stuck - yet I use initials for many others!) and when I have tried to explain them, I am greeted by confused looks.
Of course, you can ignore all of this, I’m just typing as I think of things. My experience in education, though, would recommend that you let them experience something themselves fairly early on (unless it’s a very short presentation) and then explain the key, core components. The show the components at work in other situations. You may struggle to sell it if you show that there are loads of systems. That is too much work for most people.
Give them a taste, Once they experience that they can do it, they may want and be willing to learn more. That’s what happened to me. I had NO intention of memorising binary numbers and random images. But once I learned my first deck of cards, I was hooked.
Sorry about the thesis!!! Good luck and I hope I helped somewhat.